Two more days of story outline refinement. Didn’t make any huge changes in the outline, but just focused on some greater detail in the events, made sure we understood each character’s motivations and state-of-mind going into each scene.
In the process, discovered two HUGE plot holes (ashamed to admit) but plugged them.
Sometimes you read something over and over again and don’t see the typos… these holes have the same magical quality. Our heroes spend the whole third act in a desperate effort to get to safety and a radio. When they get to that place, they spend their time with a rube goldbergian experiment to help ward off the beasties… but never use the radio.
Similarly, they take off in the end headed for town, by way of a route we’ve earlier established has been compromised.
It wasn’t hard to fix… in our minds eyes we knew kind of why that was, but we realize that we’d never addressed it. So now we’ve addressed it. Both of ’em. Fixed. Phew!
Still, feeling kinda stoopid.
Did end up writing out the dialogue for one passage… probably the last scene in the film in which we’ll have an opportunity to reveal anything about the characters through any real subtext. Last chance for a “real conversation”, in other words, so wanted to be sure we hit any points that needed hitting, yet find an elegant way to do it that didn’t feel forced. It actually worked out quite nicely, and also reveals just a little more mythos around the creatures at the same time. We’re pretty proud of it.
Still on page 61.
Hours (chip): 68